tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6915007278611427797.post7921991727735860296..comments2023-08-27T02:17:43.033-07:00Comments on The 52 Week Project: There Is No TimeElihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06433789042279549889noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6915007278611427797.post-60181465932849733032012-06-02T07:05:43.439-07:002012-06-02T07:05:43.439-07:00If the intention of this poem is to call someone o...If the intention of this poem is to call someone out (similar to Bob Dylan's 'Positively 4th Street'), I'd suggest crisper, shorter, and harsher wording. The bluntness is effective, but seems almost too well-worded and intellectual at times. Weird comment, I know, but the effect of the free verse is worse for it if it doesn't sound like an actual person in that moment with that emotion.Nick Edingerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11987651341572934920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6915007278611427797.post-25893129901332454032012-05-18T10:16:28.766-07:002012-05-18T10:16:28.766-07:00If you want to, or not. It's just you and she...If you want to, or not. It's just you and she seem to have so much in common judging by this poem! That's just where my mind goes.Brynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07312559694365248804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6915007278611427797.post-19131065550803621662012-05-18T09:57:31.344-07:002012-05-18T09:57:31.344-07:00The "antisocial openness" was meant to r...The "antisocial openness" was meant to refer to intentionally revealing too much personal information and thereby making a scene in "polite society." Perhaps I should have chosen my words better.ERIC L.https://www.blogger.com/profile/13216007825025566129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6915007278611427797.post-50503689109925783892012-05-17T23:08:43.029-07:002012-05-17T23:08:43.029-07:00This isn't a "good" or "bad&quo...This isn't a "good" or "bad" type observation: I find myself wondering if this is you or a trophy wife tired of going to the country club. I want to know more, too, why being antisocial is an issue for their relationship.Brynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07312559694365248804noreply@blogger.com