tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6915007278611427797.post5399747902223577820..comments2023-08-27T02:17:43.033-07:00Comments on The 52 Week Project: Story Fragment: My Wife Shot The DogElihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06433789042279549889noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6915007278611427797.post-1531450316182067542012-08-10T12:05:57.376-07:002012-08-10T12:05:57.376-07:00I thought the use of repetition (both in terms of ...I thought the use of repetition (both in terms of sentences and information presented) created a nice pace for this opening and made it seem more real (as if it was actually narrated by someone instead of obviously written down). Focusing on that more might be helpful to the piece, since some distractions from it, like "don't ask me... know his parents," mess with the faux-casual atmosphere I think you're going for.Nick Edingerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11987651341572934920noreply@blogger.com